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Asma

Doctor Asma
Oct 21, 2003
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#42
++ [ originally posted by baggio ] ++
Ok here's another from my collection: its called Bliss.

My instincts blur,
As a void begins to fill.
One, that I try to conquer
In my quest to hold still.

I don’t feel pain.
But I want to heal.
There isn’t anything to gain.
But I want to feel.

Escaping my misery,
With each passing thought.
I try and break free.
But my mind has me caught.

The light flickers,
As I begin to fade away,
In to the darkness that lingers.
Silently hoping, time will stay.
sweeet:D i want sth about love..
 

Torkel

f(s+1)=3((s +1)-1=3s
Jul 12, 2002
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#43
This isn't written by me, but by British poet Ted Hughes, one of my favourite poets, Sylvia Plath's husband and the man who was in my avatar not too long ago. I chose this poem from him here because the topic seemed to be love. I know this topic is about poems written by users, but this is how the master does it.

Lovesong
By Ted Hughes

He loved her and she loved him.
His kisses sucked out her whole past and future or tried to
He had no other appetite
She bit him she gnawed him she sucked
She wanted him complete inside her
Safe and sure forever and ever
Their little cries fluttered into the curtains

Her eyes wanted nothing to get away
Her looks nailed down his hands his wrists his elbows
He gripped her hard so that life
Should not drag her from that moment
He wanted all future to cease
He wanted to topple with his arms round her
Off that moment's brink and into nothing
Or everlasting or whatever there was

Her embrace was an immense press
To print him into her bones
His smiles were the garrets of a fairy palace
Where the real world would never come
Her smiles were spider bites
So he would lie still till she felt hungry
His words were occupying armies
Her laughs were an assassin's attempts
His looks were bullets daggers of revenge
His glances were ghosts in the corner with horrible secrets
His whispers were whips and jackboots
Her kisses were lawyers steadily writing
His caresses were the last hooks of a castaway
Her love-tricks were the grinding of locks
And their deep cries crawled over the floors
Like an animal dragging a great trap
His promises were the surgeon's gag
Her promises took the top off his skull
She would get a brooch made of it
His vows pulled out all her sinews
He showed her how to make a love-knot
Her vows put his eyes in formalin
At the back of her secret drawer
Their screams stuck in the wall

Their heads fell apart into sleep like the two halves
Of a lopped melon, but love is hard to stop

In their entwined sleep they exchanged arms and legs
In their dreams their brains took each other hostage

In the morning they wore each other's face
 
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baggio

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Jun 3, 2003
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  • Thread Starter #44
    hey Torks thats nice. But how about something you've written?
    Dont worry, we dont care much for love in this thread ;)
     

    Asma

    Doctor Asma
    Oct 21, 2003
    3,658
    #45
    ok my poem ..its called "the right guy! "

    lying on my bed trying to figure out the key to this mess,
    what have i done to make u feel deppressed?
    should i apoloize?or simply feel sorry for myself?
    is it Christina,Courtney,Sarah or Beth?
    so many questions i want to ask,
    but i'm afraid its a difficult task,
    C'mon be a man and confess,
    or arent u man enough?
    sadly,i didnt listen to my friends' voices,
    telling me not to make wrong choices,
    but yet,i followed my heart not my mind,
    and as a consequence,left me behind,
    i was the victim of your lies,
    sadly,u didnt hear me cry,
    sleepless,helpless,loveless...was I,
    when will i find the right guy?!

    ta-da! :D
     
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    You'll find a million right guys for every moment. There isnt anyone right enough, to last us a lifetime. ;)
     

    Lilianna

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    Apr 3, 2003
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    #48
    just because deej asked me...

    i will send a poem that i found,about a friendship turned into love...

    it's called the the

    Death of Me


    Everything you could have been
    Everything you'll be.
    Everything you dream about
    And everything you see.
    All the times you feel so much
    And times you let them go.
    Times you thought you wanted love
    And times you'll never know.
    Parts of you, you cannot hide
    Parts I'll never see.
    Parts that want to be alone
    And parts you share with me.
    All these things that make you whole
    I love like no one could.
    And this is why I dream of you
    In ways a lover would.
    For friends is not enough for me
    I know that it's been years.
    But love has grown to more than this
    Despite my greatest fears.
    Take a look behind these eyes
    And see the death of me.
    The love I feel for my best friend
    Though he will never see.
     

    Dan

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    Mar 9, 2004
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    #49
    Here is my attempt a poetry:

    rate please!

    Chapter

    Staring at you from afar
    Sitting next to him
    Silent Spliced Smile
    So he can fill your whim

    Between the crowds i stare
    Because of your face
    Beautiful Billowing Brilliance
    Beating at a fast pace

    Jumping to my feet
    Jousting nasty eyes
    Just Juvinille Jesting
    Joureryed for lies

    I dont see what your eyes
    Imagine to be on this beast
    Ideas In Instants
    Im seeing his genuine side least

    Slow realisation kills this
    Sadened illusion
    Struck Speedily Strongly
    So much Confusion

    Running away you go
    Realising my view
    Rushing remains real
    Raging hate anew

    Dumbstruck by you again
    Destraught by your clues
    Defeated Destroyed Demeanied
    Dying, you dont love me too



    ..?
     
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    ++ [ originally posted by Lilianna ] ++
    just because deej asked me...

    i will send a poem that i found,about a friendship turned into love...

    it's called the the

    Death of Me


    Everything you could have been
    Everything you'll be.
    Everything you dream about
    And everything you see.
    All the times you feel so much
    And times you let them go.
    Times you thought you wanted love
    And times you'll never know.
    Parts of you, you cannot hide
    Parts I'll never see.
    Parts that want to be alone
    And parts you share with me.
    All these things that make you whole
    I love like no one could.
    And this is why I dream of you
    In ways a lover would.
    For friends is not enough for me
    I know that it's been years.
    But love has grown to more than this
    Despite my greatest fears.
    Take a look behind these eyes
    And see the death of me.
    The love I feel for my best friend
    Though he will never see.
    Lil, that has to be one of your best posts of all time. :)
     
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    baggio

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    ++ [ originally posted by blackmint ] ++
    Here is my attempt a poetry:

    rate please!

    Chapter

    Staring at you from afar
    Sitting next to him
    Silent Spliced Smile
    So he can fill your whim

    Between the crowds i stare
    Because of your face
    Beautiful Billowing Brilliance
    Beating at a fast pace

    Jumping to my feet
    Jousting nasty eyes
    Just Juvinille Jesting
    Joureryed for lies

    I dont see what your eyes
    Imagine to be on this beast
    Ideas In Instants
    Im seeing his genuine side least

    Slow realisation kills this
    Sadened illusion
    Struck Speedily Strongly
    So much Confusion

    Running away you go
    Realising my view
    Rushing remains real
    Raging hate anew

    Dumbstruck by you again
    Destraught by your clues
    Defeated Destroyed Demeanied
    Dying, you dont love me too



    ..?
    Id have to give this one a thumbs up! :thumb:

    Miss D is the one who rates things around here tho. ;)
     

    Dan

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    Mar 9, 2004
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    #54
    I could post a pretty contraversial one i made the other day. But im afraid it would get this thread closed.
     
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    baggio

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    Well, atleast an outline would help. Accordingly, we'd know if you should post.
     

    Dan

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    #58
    Hmmm but the whole point of it the poem is that you relise what it is about halfway through..
     

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